Friday, February 24, 2012

Friday Flash: Over (Campaign Challenge)

"Happier" days~
I wasn't originally going to do this week's campaign challenge - honestly, I'm almost more sick of it than I am of all the tagging posts =P  - but I needed a flash prompt for this week and it seemed like the thing to do...especially since I already did just a sample last week. So, I've decided to do the flash prompt after all. For fun, I suppose. (Although feel free to vote for me, although I don't think I have much chance considering I'm what...#200? lol.)

Anyway, for those who actually are NOT in the campaign, the guidelines (and everyone else can read them one more time to see if they've memorized it yet!)

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count. 
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these:
  • end the story with the words: "everything faded." (also included in the word count)
  • include the word "orange" in the story
  • write in the same genre you normally write
  • make your story 200 words exactly!
Technically this piece is still in the genre I "normally" write, considering they're old characters. This short story features Devon and Alicia, and takes place between the events of CROSS//Rebirth and CROSS//Revenge.

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Shadows crept across the wall. The one on the far right flurried with every movement of Alicia’s arm as she pulled more clothes out of the closet and shoved them into packs and bags. Devon watched from the bed and counted each shadow as it flew by.

“So this is it,” he said as Alicia zipped up the last of her bags, an orange one she bought for their trip to visit her parents last Christmas. “Just like that it’s all over.”

She no more than glanced at him before sliding the bag off the bed. “You cheated on me.”

“We’ve been over this…”

“With my ex-girlfriend!”

Devon sunk further into the bed as Alicia gathered her pile of bags and cases around the bedroom door. He didn’t want to part that way, however. Over a year together was too good for that. “I’m sorry.”

“Sorry doesn’t change the past.” Alicia propped open the door. “Bye.”

She disappeared with the first set of bags; Devon didn’t offer to get up and help. There went his girlfriend, his would be fiancĂ©e, the woman he once swore he would love forever. Gone because of what happened a thousand years before.

Everything faded.

20 comments:

  1. Thanks for sharing, Hildred! I like how the story begins with what appears to be a contemporary-day break-up and then came the hook. Now I'm curious to know what had happened a thousand years before.

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    1. Oh, just the usual reincarnation shenanigans =P

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  2. Ooh I love it! I really want to know more of the story!! Sounds really cool!

    I'm entry #19

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  3. I don't blame her a bit. Well done!

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    1. One thing about it, woman's got convictions. Doesn't take me long to figure out how she reacts to anything =P

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  4. I'm glad you decided to participate, because this is killer!

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    1. Thanks! I enjoyed the 15 minutes I took to write and edit this as well, haha.

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  5. Why all the procrastination! Just get on with the things you decide to do in the first place! Otherwise too much energy is wasted!

    Interesting story, would like to know what happened 1,000 years ago!

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  6. I liked this. Being a new follower I'm wondering if it's a 'real' thousand years, or an exaggeration :-)

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  7. Really enjoyed this & I'm glad she left :-) I'm # 61.

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    1. She may be out of the relationship but at least she isn't out of the story eh =)

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  8. Love the last line. Very ominous. Wonder what the backstory is there :)

    Oh and... Tag, you're it!

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    1. Just your run-of-the-mill fantasy reincarnation story =)

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  9. An illustration from the Sims! Do you play?! I'm writing a novel inspired by Sims characters so I had to ask.

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    1. Yup, I've played since the original Sims, but three is definitely the best! I only play novel characters now. It's pretty much my favorite non-writing novelling thing to do.

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  10. My father lived in Yokinawa and Kyoto for many years in the 90's. Nice to see you're from Japan. I loved this. I'm here for the Platform Building Campaign and look forward to getting to know you and your work. ~Cheers

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    1. I've never been to Yokinawa, but I visited Kyoto a couple of years ago. Very beautiful place. Nice to know you too!

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